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HELLO, FEEDBACK ON THIS WORK 1)CONCEPTUAL CLARIFICATIONS (You are required to use this section to explore your independent variable. Therefore, you should start by providing definitional clarity on the meaning of your topic) i think the begining of this subheading is not straight forward ,looking at this statement in bracket (In the current era, the corporate world is facing the hype of CSR. Looking at the wide range of the organizational matters, they are engaged in showing socially responsible behavior. However, the definition of CSR in the corporate and the academic world has remained unstandardized. In this regard, Jackson and Hawker (2001) argued that the researchers are looking for the standardized definition of CSR)is like beating around the bush,please see the sample of a winning dissertation my supervisor gave i sent to you as an attachment,kindly amend the begining by going straight to the point. Also amend the statement in bracket(but there is no single definition available) because there are alot of defination in the work .these statement are contradicting the work.please see the guide i sent and see how straight forward the person begining was .kindly ammend. 2)2.2.1 Examples of CSR in the Modern World-the subheading name should be changed please,you remember that my supervisor said he doesnt want me to segment it to europe or US,that he wants the entire literature to be discussed instead of talking about US or europe.kindly amend. 3)2.2.2 Is CSR a Noble Cause or Mode of Advertisement--i dont feel this is better subheading name for this part,kindly change this name. 4)2.2.3 Stakeholders' Perception of CSR--i feel this subheading is too descriptive there is no need describing those aspect of CSR.Kindly analyse and avoid describing.please amend. 5)2.3 Brand Perception-check my first feed back i sent to you from my supervisor,he asked me to take out this brand perception see this comment in bracket(UNDER 2.3....BRAND PERCEPTION.....he said i should change the sub heading to CSR impact on brand perception,and do a detailed write up on this with proper critical analysis...)kindly ammend 6) i dont understand this statement in bracket(A CSR strategy can depend on the company's size because a large company would have different perceptions of CSR compared to large companies (Russo & Perrini, 2009). under section 2.3.3 CSR Impact on Brand Perception.i think the statement is wrong.kindly amend this.
Generally i still feel the work is too descriptive and the write up is not flowing,it should be more of critical analysis and should flow,kindly amend this you can see the guide i sent to you initially so you see a wining literature review.i dont think is by having alot of subheading that will make the work a better one you can have 3 or 4 subheading that are well detailed,critically analysed and will be discussing the entire literature that will make the work a wining lit. review .i wanted professional touch that is why i decided to use your company.kindly amend all my feedback and revert.